Sunday, May 19, 2013

A Crushing Blow

Image: The given words

He was a cut above the rest
so he believed. But an opaque squint
on his nebulous past kept haunting
him. He did not dare breathe a word
on his otherwise unblemished record

His reflects were perfect, his timings
were good. He notched winnings
with crushing blows to his opponents.
He came with fists blazing. He had visions of
a  great champion. He was untouched

But the stigma kept hovering over his head
It cast a bleak future over designs of
him as a torch bearer of his generation
It was a mistake of the past that kept
tripping  him. After all it was just a slab
of fix a small portion that would not cause
real harm, not much anyway

Sadly, a sordid episode was not easily forgotten
by the fraternity. An icon with no tainted past
was expected no less which he could not fulfill
A slight baggage on his young shoulders kept
gnawing on his ambitions. It broke his little heart

Written for Sunday Whirl, A Baker’s Dozen - wordle #109

20 comments:

  1. sometimes we have to be willing to let go those mistakes of our past so we can move forward...and be the leaders that our generation needs....

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    1. Yes, eventually they would gain credence and move on forward. Thanks Brian!

      Hank

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  2. To get to what came before can be a burden at any shore, when really one should live up to what they want, but always before seems to haunt.

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    1. They try as hard
      To play their part
      But records of the past
      May often last

      Hank

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  3. This sounds so much like the true story of your favorite sports personality, a boxer!! Once the dye of doubt is cast, it is so difficult to wash away the stain!! Hank you write with great compassion!!

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    1. Somehow the words point to certain directions - the beauty of a wordle. Thanks Nanka!

      Hank

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  4. I love the different directions we all take with the wordle! Always a treat to read where you go.

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    1. That is true. The variety of words provide countless options. Thanks Peggy!

      Hank

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  5. Yes, the younger generation should be leaving the past behind and moving forward. I am so happy to see that you are here with us, Hank.

    Pamela

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    1. It may provide a choice if it's not serious. I'll make it a regular from now on. Thanks Pam!

      Hank

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  6. How long it takes to realize that past mistakes haunt us to remind us not to go there again. You write with compassion and sensitivity for your subject. Your reader wants to pat this character on the back and give him a word of understanding and support.

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2013/05/19/mizfit-on-remembering/

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  7. Lessons learned in the past should not be burdens but stepping stones. However guilt in not resolving wrongs done may well prey on one's mind.

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  8. Another interesting write from Hank. Letting go is sometimes hard to do as we try to push forward on the journey.

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  10. It can happen, trip and fall.....and then we must "fix."

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  11. Such a tender ending..baggage is a bugger to shake off..however we can perhaps re-adjust the load to carry it more easily..

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  12. I have always struggled to forgive myself for mistakes, hell I struggle to forgive myself for being who I am. This is a powerful story if it isn't really it sounds very genuine

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  13. A strong poem that carried me along with it, the given words fitting naturally.

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  14. Darn those sordid mistakes... and the way they hang on. I enjoyed this write, Hank. Well done!

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